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   Growing up in a world with an ever-increasing population, many children are taught to compete with each other from their earliest memory so as to surpass others. Although this practice is embraced by many, others remain unconvinced of its merits. They insist that for children to achieve greater things in their adulthood they should learn how to co-operate with others. Personally speaking, I think it is better to teach children how to co-operate, because in today's society people always need to work with others.
   Those in favour of the competitive approach argue that competition skills have to be instilled into children from an early age if they are to survive in their future lives. Indeed, fierce competition starts from primary school where students vie to get better grades in order to enter a good middle school and to get admitted into a prestigious university later on. This is followed by constant pressure to outshine one's co-workers if career advancement is to be achieved. Moreover, instead of being an unavoidable nuisance, competition should be embraced, for it is the driving force behind all progress. Understandably, people tend to perform better when they strive to beat their opponents, which is the very reason why most athletes run faster in critical races than they do in their training.
   On the other hand, opponents of this view also have their reasons. To begin with, to survive and prosper, either at school or in society, co-operation is essential. No one can solely rely on his or her own talents to achieve academic success. In fact, many key factors that contribute to one's scholastic achievement such as the instruction from teachers and the exchange of ideas with classmates require co-operation and interpersonal skills. The need to work with and assist each other is also reflected in every organization, be it a company or a laboratory, where teamwork is a prerequisite for most job seekers. Furthermore, if children are taught how to work well with others, they are more likely to establish a positive rapport wherever they go. By helping each other toward the same goal, people can form genuine friendships.
   Personally, I encourage kids to co-operate with each other. In a world where people have become increasingly interdependent, it is imperative to teach our children how to work with rather than against others.

【答案解析】 1.语言表达
   本文的语言简洁明了，清晰地表达了作者的观点。本文中一系列连接词的用法，使文章变得流畅连贯：although，indeed，moreover，on the other hand，to begin with，furthermore，personally。
   ● Those in favour of the competitive approach argue that competition skills have to be instilled into children from an early age if they are to survive in their future lives.
   句型Those in favour of...argue that...可用于在议论文中摆出论据。
   ● On the other hand, opponents of this view also have their reasons.
   句型On the other hand...可用于在议论文中陈述观点。
   2.逻辑结构
   本文是典型的总分总结构的议论文。作者开篇先陈述事实并表达自己的观点，第二段和第三段分别对两种观点进行论述，使论证更加客观全面。最后一段作者重申自己的偏向。