问答题
假定你是南京某中学的学生，叫李华。“五一”劳动节将至，你校外籍教师Alex打算利用“五一”长假外出旅游，希望你能为他提供参考建议。请你根据下列图表中的内容为Alex提供旅游建议。要求词数在100左右。
【正确答案】[参考范文]
Dear Alex,
Here is my suggestion about your travel during the long May Day holiday. On May 1st, you may take the 8:00 flight to Beijing. You are to visit the Tiananmen Square in the afternoon. Next day, I suggest you (should) visit the Great Wall, the longest wall in the world. For the next two days, you can visit the Summer Palace, walk around here and there in the downtown section of Beijing and do some shopping. On May 5th, you are to take a train to Tai'an to climb Mount Tai, which is quite near to the city. You have to stay at the top for the night, and next early morning, if lucky, you may enjoy a wonderful view of the sunrise, which will never be forgettable indeed. In the afternoon, you may return to Nanjing by train.
I hope you will enjoy your travel.
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear Alex,
Here is my suggestion about your travel during the long May Day holiday. On May 1st, you may take the 8:00 flight to Beijing. You are to visit the Tiananmen Square in the afternoon. Next day, I suggest you (should) visit the Great Wall, the longest wall in the world. For the next two days, you can visit the Summer Palace, walk around here and there in the downtown section of Beijing and do some shopping. On May 5th, you are to take a train to Tai'an to climb Mount Tai, which is quite near to the city. You have to stay at the top for the night, and next early morning, if lucky, you may enjoy a wonderful view of the sunrise, which will never be forgettable indeed. In the afternoon, you may return to Nanjing by train.
I hope you will enjoy your travel.
Yours,
Li Hua
【答案解析】[解析]
(1)此类作文容易写成单调的时间状语的堆砌。建议使用(and)next day，for the next two days等，以取代on May…。
(2)在动同时态上，应用将来时，在表示预期时考虑使用be to do句型。
(3)图表中提到登长城、游览颐和园、登泰山等活动，建议使用“后位补述”的写作手段，如：
…and I do think it will make you feel really excited
…which is one of the few places in the world that enjoy a long history and is still well known
…on top of which, if lucky enough, you will enjoy a view of the sunrise
[学生习作]
Dear Alex,
Here is my suggestion about your travel during the long May Day holiday. On May 1st, you (are to) leave for Beijing by air at 8:00 am and visit the Tiananmen Square after you arrive (去除after you arrive) in the afternoon. The (去除the) next day, you could go to the Great Wall, which is the most famous place of interest in China. Maybe you will feel a little tired, so on 3rd and 4th (改为for the next two days), you could (改为can) go to the Summer Palace to have a walk (去除to have a walk) and go shopping. (去除and go shopping, 因为不合逻辑，上句可改为so for the next two days, you can go to the Summer Palace, which is not far from the city, and enjoy the wonderful view there. )On May 5th, you (may) leave Beijing for Shandong by train to climb the (去除the) Mount Tai. You can stay on the top of the mountain at (改为for the) night and see (改为enjoy) the sunrise in the (去除 in the) next day (去除day) morning. In the afternoon, you (are to) return to Nanjing.
I hope you will enjoy your travel.
Yours,
Li Hua
(1)此类作文容易写成单调的时间状语的堆砌。建议使用(and)next day，for the next two days等，以取代on May…。
(2)在动同时态上，应用将来时，在表示预期时考虑使用be to do句型。
(3)图表中提到登长城、游览颐和园、登泰山等活动，建议使用“后位补述”的写作手段，如：
…and I do think it will make you feel really excited
…which is one of the few places in the world that enjoy a long history and is still well known
…on top of which, if lucky enough, you will enjoy a view of the sunrise
[学生习作]
Dear Alex,
Here is my suggestion about your travel during the long May Day holiday. On May 1st, you (are to) leave for Beijing by air at 8:00 am and visit the Tiananmen Square after you arrive (去除after you arrive) in the afternoon. The (去除the) next day, you could go to the Great Wall, which is the most famous place of interest in China. Maybe you will feel a little tired, so on 3rd and 4th (改为for the next two days), you could (改为can) go to the Summer Palace to have a walk (去除to have a walk) and go shopping. (去除and go shopping, 因为不合逻辑，上句可改为so for the next two days, you can go to the Summer Palace, which is not far from the city, and enjoy the wonderful view there. )On May 5th, you (may) leave Beijing for Shandong by train to climb the (去除the) Mount Tai. You can stay on the top of the mountain at (改为for the) night and see (改为enjoy) the sunrise in the (去除 in the) next day (去除day) morning. In the afternoon, you (are to) return to Nanjing.
I hope you will enjoy your travel.
Yours,
Li Hua