【正确答案】[范文]
   The bar chart gives information about post-school qualifications in terms of the different levels of further education reached by men and women in Australia in 1999.
   We can see immediately that there were substantial differences in the proportion of men and women at different levels. The biggest gender difference was at the lowest post-school level, where 90% of those who held a skilled vocational diploma were men, compared with only 10% of women. By contrast, more women held undergraduate diplomas (70%) and marginally more women reached degree level (55%).
   At the higher levels of education, men with postgraduate diplomas clearly outnumbered their female counterparts (70% and 30%, respectively), and also constituted 60% of master's graduates.
   Thus we can see that more men than women hold qualifications at the lower and higher levels of education, while more women reached undergraduate diploma level than men. However, the gender difference was smallest at the level of bachelor's degree.

【答案解析】 1.语言表达
   本文为了避免词句的重复，运用了各种方法，如从句、分词短语、各种代词和连词。
   ● The biggest gender difference was at the lowest post-school level, where 90% of those who held a skilled vocational diploma were men, compared with only 10% of women.
   本句用从句和分词短语将信息很好地连贯起来。注意compared with的用法，在所有比较两个事物的句子当中都可以通用。
   ● At the higher levels of education, men with postgraduate diplomas clearly outnumbered their female counterparts (70% and 30%, respectively), and also constituted 60% of master's graduates.
   注意引用百分比的方法：用括号以及用constitute+数字。outnumber表示超过，类似的表达还有surpass，exceed等。使用counterpart这个词也是让语言避免重复的很好方法，此处表示female with postgraduate diplomas。
   2.逻辑结构
   本文是典型的总分总结构的小作文。开篇先paraphrase原题，第二、三部分开始描述柱状图的细节，其中对每个重要的百分比都进行了引用和比较，最后一部分总结表格内容。