Children Should Be Trained Under Certain Protection

As is vividly portrayed in the picture, on a freezing and penetrating winter day, a middle-aged man on heavy clothes is training his almost naked children. This cartoon has reflected a common phenomenon in our society that some parents have adopted hard and inhuman methods to foster their children. Essential as high intensity training is, a healthy body plays a much more important part in our daily life.

The most important point is that nothing can be achieved without a strong body. Being exposed to extreme weather can make some organs function disorderly. If their body isn’t properly protected, children will be less immune to the diseases, which will in turn contribute to damaging their body. Therefore, a vicious circle will occur.

In addition, since the extreme training also serves the future development of children, parents can change a little the way they educate their children. Should training and keeping healthy be combined together, the young generation would surely become strong both in body and in mind.

In my opinion, children’s health should come first under any circumstances. While training their children, parents should pay attention to the acceptability of children’s body. Only in this way can their children have a bright future. 

【审题构思】

此次作文题是漫画作文。漫画作文通常反映一个社会现象或生活哲理，要求根据自己对漫的理解来写作。第一，要仔细观察漫画，弄清漫画的寓意，树立文章的论点；第二，安排好文章的结构，以三段布局为宜；第三，掌握常用的论证技巧，进行充分论证。

【解析】

结构上，范文在首段就描述了漫画的内容和所揭示的社会现象，并在首段最后一句话清楚地说明了自己的看法。接下来的两段阐述了自己持这一观点的原因，作者认为不保护好孩子的身体而进行高强度的训练最终会导致恶性循环，父母应该换一种方式教育他们的孩子。最后一段作出了总结。句式上，作者用了几个从句，倒装句以及虚拟句式，使得文章长短句交错，呈现出美感。