作文题目及要求：请以“Great Changes”为题，用英语写一篇短文(作文开头已给出)。内容要点如下：
(1)某中学地震后三年来的变化，包括教学条件、活动场所以及师生精神面貌等；
(2)发生变化的原因；
(3)你的感想。
学生的作文：
Great Changes
I am deeply impressed by the great changes that have taken place in the school over the past three years.(上面题目和第一段已给出，下面是学生续写)
Three years ago,this high school was destroyed by earthquake.The buildings and the playground were turn ruins.However,Nowaday,the building are built and very beautiful.The playground more larger than before.The students are enjoy playing game in the playground.
Facing the beautiful school,the teachers and the students are happy with smile face.
Though the power of earthquake is big,the government is devoted into many sources into the school education and construction.It help the school rebuilt and give the promise to the students.The most important is that the sport of the people.
To sum up,the great changes that have taken place in the school.Not only the society help it but also the spirit of the local people help themselves rid of the difficulties.I hope they can happy forever.
请对该作文进行评分。(评分说明：满分25分。评分等级分五档，第一档25～23分、第二档22～19分、第三档18～15分、第四档14～10分、第五档9～0分。)
17分。此篇作文紧扣主题，基本覆盖所有要点；语言错误影响了部分意思的表达，但多数句子基本正确；基本达到预期写作目的。故列为第三档，给出17分。
从语言、内容和篇章结构三个方面分别进行优缺点的点评。
语言方面：此篇作文句子较流畅，但是出现多处简单的语法错误。
①Three years ago,this high school was destroyed by earthquake.The buildings and the playground were turn ruins.这两个句子中，earthquake前缺少冠词，turn应改为过去分词turned,且后面应加上介词into,调整为Three years ago,this high school was destroyed by the earthquake.The buildings and the playground were turned into ruins.
②The playground more larger than before.这句话中缺少系动词，并且more和larger不能同时出现，应改为The playground is bigger than before.
③The students are enjoy playing game in the playground.这句话应改为The students are enjoying playing games in the playground.
④It help the school rebuilt and give the promise to the students.这句话中，时态应为一般过去时，且rebuilt为过去分词，此处应用原形，可改为It helped the school rebuild and gave the promise to the students.
⑤Though the power of earthquake is big,the government is devoted into many sources into the school education and construction.这句话中，the government is devoted into many sources表达不准确，且用词不当，应优化为Although earthquakes possess immense power,the government has dedicated considerable resources to school education and construction.
⑥To sum up,the great changes that have taken place in the school.这句话应删除the和that,改为To sum up,great changes have taken place in the school.
⑦I hope they can happy forever.这句话中，情态动词can后不可直接跟形容词happy,应在can后面加上be,调整为I hope they can be happy forever.
此外，单词拼写也有错误：
①However,Nowaday,the building are built and very beautiful.这句话中，Nowaday缺少字母s且首字母应小写，应改为nowadays;building后应加s。
②The most important is that the sport of the people.这句话中，应把sport改成spirit,同时删除that。
在此篇作文中，也可以多采用一些长难句，并且用到的词汇应该符合相应学段，有一些句子需要优化，例如：Facing the beautiful school,the teachers and the students are happy with smile face.可改为In the face of such a scene,the students and teachers are very relieved and happy.
内容方面：题目中要求的某中学地震后三年的变化、发生变化的原因和感想都有呈现，但还有优化的空间，如写三年来的变化时，师生的精神面貌方面可以增加一些细节描写，句式和用词都可以更加灵活多样。例如：The disaster brought with it a sense of unity and resilience that has become a defining characteristic of our school community.The teachers,with their unwavering dedication,have inspired their students to persevere and excel academically.The students,in turn,have shown remarkable resilience and a positive attitude towards learning,overcoming the psychological scars brought by the earthquake.
篇章结构方面：作文分为三段，结构格式还是较为规整的，但是层次感不足，可以先在第一段列举一些地震带来的巨大影响，以及政府在震后的一些举措；第二段写学生在新的设施里进行的学习活动等，指出他们的心情与之前相比有何不同，体现出对比；最后一段表达出感想和期许。