【正确答案】Bai Yangdian, once called "the Yangtze River Delta in the North", actually has a cottage shape of its own, which is quite different from the Delta. In the rainy South, people build sloping roofs to ease water flow. Here in the North, the flat roof of the cottage is often the place where the grains are aired in the sun. In history, whenever the cottages were flooded, villagers had to move things to their roofs. In that regard, their houses are built so closely that some of their roofs almost touch each other.
【答案解析】 本文节选自冯骥才的散文《白洋淀之忧》,文字上难免有些跳跃和突兀,在翻译时需作某些必要的补充。
1.第1句中,“北国江南”不宜直接译成the southern kind of north,因为江南多指“长江中下游以南”,因而可变通为the Yangtze River Delta in the North,更显其褒义色彩。“但村舍的形制自具特色”说明此处与上文有转折之意,表达转折的含义不一定要用but或者however,还可以像参考译文一样在once...,actually...中体现出来。
2.第2句分号前的部分,“南方多雨”可译成In the South, there is plenty of rain,但整合句子,还可简练地译为In the rainy South;“屋顶是坡顶”可简单译成the roof is sloped,但分析起来,其实南方多雨和屋顶是坡顶有因果关系,所以可增译to ease water flow来说明这层关系。
3.第2句分号后的部分,“这里的村舍则不同”似乎可逐字对译成cottages here are different,但此处的“这里”指的是与前一分句的South相对的North,故可将这层意思译出来,比如可译为Here in the North。“不同”这层意思常可用be different(from)...这个表达来译出,但通过对屋顶形制的描述来暗示这层对比关系更妙。“屋顶是晒粮食的地方”中的“屋顶”,若只译成the roof of the cottage,显然没有译出其与南方屋顶形制的不同。北方应该是平屋顶,故可增译为the flat roof(of the cottage)。
4.第2句后半句中的“每逢水大洪泛”可选用overflow、inundate、with the water rolling in或flood来表达;需注意,此处指的应是“房屋”在水大洪泛时遭围困,故译文可考虑译作whenever the cottages were flooded;“屋里的东西”字面意思是stuff in the house,也可概括为things。
5.最后一句中,“房屋彼此挨得很近”在语义上与前文有一定的衔接,即因为北方的(平)屋顶有这样的用处,所以房屋才会建得彼此挨得很近,故翻译时可考虑增译For this reason、Concerning this、In that regard等表达。